BOOM! The Volcano exploded and hit our helicopter. I had forgoten everything that had happened. The only thing I remember was being in a huge helicoptor with my big brother. My Monkey dragged me onto sure. He had saved my life. I gazed down at my sore shin and asked my Monkey if he could get me something.
I stood up and looked around. I sore an old rusty windmill.It I walked closer to it. There was little hole in it. I walked in it but there was only sticks, rocks, leaves and a little black bird. in it.
I walked out of the windmill and ran down a path incase someone comes to find me. I started to get puffed so I walked and waked some more. I was looking at the things beside me to see if there was some water or food or maybe even a little hut that could give me shelter. I was so tired so I stoped and found a little bunch of grass
I heard something. It was another helicopter I thought it was coming to save me. So I waved my arms every were, but they didn’t notice me at all.I started to get puffed so I walked the rest. I think I hear something I said in joy to my Monkey.It is a helicopter we are saved! The people in the Helicopter looked down at us.They landed safely. They ran to me to make sure I was ok. I got my Monkey and we jumped in the helicopter.I was so happy to be at safe home. With food and water not salty water.
Well done Maia! You have used sentences well to write your story! You have also used a range of verbs and onomatopoeia to show sound. Remember to use adverbs (silently, quickly) to help show the reader how your character is doing something.
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