Well done Maia you have retold a great version of Tane and the Three Kete. I like how you used paragraphs to break up your story. You have the events in the correct order as well - well done.
Next time you need to add more rich vocabulary. Rich vocabulary shows the reader feelings and details so that they can paint a picture in their mind. For example, what would the wind ropes that Tawhiri Matea made look like? What would they sound like?
Well done Maia you have retold a great version of Tane and the Three Kete. I like how you used paragraphs to break up your story. You have the events in the correct order as well - well done.
ReplyDeleteNext time you need to add more rich vocabulary. Rich vocabulary shows the reader feelings and details so that they can paint a picture in their mind. For example, what would the wind ropes that Tawhiri Matea made look like? What would they sound like?
Nic